Oh look, comments on your page that are recent! :D

Ohh, and, by the way, I took the liberties of putting up a private document (so, only I can see it right now) of the story that you sent me up onto Google Docs so that I could toss edits onto it. If you want, I can edit permissions so that those with the link can view, or whatever else you want me to do with it. As it is, I looked mostly for grammatical points, and will be scanning through at least one more time for other stray errors, and then move onto fluidity. Regardless, there is currently a useful number of highlights on the story.

If you ever want assistance with grammatical such and such then I can provide just that. I am more comfortable with leaving comments on online files, such as through Google Docs, but I'll work with whatever method you prefer and are more comfortable with. I will be thorough when I actually get around to critiquing, and much in the ways of highlighted text will spawn forth.

I have dominion over thine comments!

I sigh at the agony that approachs.

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