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Đăng ngày: 22 Thg05, 2016 @ 7:09pm

Decent story for the most part although it has a few issues:

- Pacing Issues

Things at times seemed to either move a bit too slow for my taste while other times, things would move way too quickly. Little things would get covered a bit too much that doesn't really add to the story while other major events would just get grazed, which should be extended.

- Spelling/Grammar Errors

Found two errors

- Character development

It was okay for the most part although somethings could have been expanded on (family situations, outside of school life, etc.).
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